
The hardest part of writing is making yourself sit down to write.
Of the many first blog post lines I have ever read, I think that yesterday’s Over Easy first line was one of the best:
Yesterday I was up against a wall.
After reading that first line, I had to read the post, because I could not help but wonder what this author was experiencing. Turns out Kris was facing a bit of writer’s block:
Suffering from a bit of writer’s block even. I could not come up with a topic for today’s post that stirred my passion as an activist, a person, a parent… anything. My only semi-solid thought was a post about gun control, but it seems like such a large and complex issue.
By coincidence, I was in the same position over the weekend, so I decided to share a few writing tips that I have learned, and invite others to share as well.
Keep this fun site in mind as well, because it impossible not to learn and enjoy while you visit.
I was in this position because I have been researching my legal case, and writing an ineffective-assistance-of-counsel claim (11.42 in Kentucky) against my trial lawyer. I was experiencing writer’s block for online essays, because I have been doing formulaic legal writing for the past month.
To get out of the legal writing mindset and return to the fun of writing, I phoned my retired-English-teacher elderly mother over the weekend and asked her to reflect on the worst of the worst that she observed in writing over the years, and with that in mind, share her handful of key writing tips for anyone covering any topics. My mother, Letty Owings, is 88 years old, and here is what she offers:
1. Begin with whatever you begin with.
If you are writing about your recent trip to Hawaii, for example, do not begin with “We decided to go to Hawaii,” because you obviously decided to go to Hawaii or you wouldn’t have gone there! Letty uses the Christmas letter as an example of where one might see unnecessary overstatements of the obvious: “This year has gone by so fast. Here it is Christmas and I don’t have anything ready.” The year obviously went by, or else it wouldn’t be Christmas!
2. Be careful with adverbs.
The adverb “very” is terrible, according to Letty. For effective embellishment, replace the adverb “very” with an adjective. For example, rather than say “very hot,” say “scorching” and leave it at that. Do not be tempted to turn scorching into an adverb by saying “scorching hot,” because the adverb diminishes. Also, anything that ends in an -ly is an adverb that can diminish through unnecessary overstatement and redundancy. For example, a “brutally horrific murder” is a murder, and what murder is nice and polite? Are not all murders horrific? A better way to embellish would be to say, “She was tortured and bludgeoned.”
3.The Dreaded “It”
The dummy subject ‘it,’ followed by the ‘be’ word ‘very’ can kill, especially at a post beginning. While sometimes the only or best word at the time, rather than say: “it was a very horrific scene with marbles in the aisle,” try, “When I ran to an exit, I slipped in marbles and fell on my back.”
4. Omit Omit Omit
As Strunk and White insist in their classic Elements of style, OMIT needless words, making cuts and edits, thus allowing meaning, rather than overwriting. Growing up with my mother, she red-penned my writing and deleted my thesaurus enhanced writing. Oh the shouting, crying, vows never to write again, but rather leave home and submit my sophomoric screeds to caring folks who were, for the most part, more interested in weed that in essays.
What are your favorite first lines, from fiction or nonfiction? I offer two, for hooks that one cannot avoid but reading on:
This is what happened, — “The Mist,” by Stephen King.
or,
We were somewhere around Barstow when the drugs began to kick in. — Hunter S. Thompson
Share your writing tips, secrets, marketing techniques, style, where to get ideas, share some concepts, or anything else bout blogging/ news linking, as well you your experience with writer’s block! Improv/warmup ideas, anything on writing of on any topic, please join!
Also, what first lines last lines are memorable for you?
Photo by Erin Kohlenberg released under a Creative Commons license.



172 Comments

Good morning, Crane-Station. Interesting topic! I usually have my OE Friday posts at least started by Monday, and spend time off and on during the week massaging them, adding, deleting, rewriting, reorganizing. I envy people who can just dash something good off with very little revision.
It is sometimes unavoidable, but I try to convert any passive voice sentences to active voice.
Thanks, C-S, now you’ve done it, you made me think about how to write. I go ahead and do it, on the conviction that I have to go back over it anyway to make it work. I like; “Proceed”, especially as used in the presidential debates.
My writers block trick is to just start writing whatever comes to mind. I’ll fill up 2-3 paragraphs worth of misspelled, improperly punctuated, feckless ramblings and then see what I’ve got. Normally, I’ve got at least one sentence worth saving, so I start there.
Boxturtle (If I don’t have a good sentence, I’ll go walk the dog)
I’m no electrician. When I’ve got a problem that needs solving I call my buddy Dominic. He’s a master electrician. He can usually help me sort it out.
;o)
Good Morning Crane-Station,
My radio station must have gone off the air, that wake up call was a big fail, just getting my coffee set to brewing. I’ve been composing resolutions against legislative support for certain state level ALEC bills coming at us fast and furious in WI.
Thanks for opening the show this morning.
Good Morning, Crane-Station
Here it is. Morning. I very much like writing at morning blogs. I’d say more, but I can’t think.
*
That’s my sleepyheaded attempt to use some of the “dont’s” spelled out by your mom. :) Thank mom for us, would you?
And, a big hug to you, Rachel.
CS, thank you for the compliment. I’m touched. Thank you for the post and host as well.
Good morning all you other firedogs.
Charlie Pierce has very colorful writing style, and one of the little phrases he uses after a recap of something egregious — usually a right-wing speaker’s far out statement — is, “We continue.” I chuckle every time I see it.
Oh, man. I missed that. How could I leave something like that laying about some someone else to run with?
Worketh thou not on energized circuits, for frying in ones own fat is a slothful process and it may be hours before thy maker sees fit to end thy misery.
Boxturtle (From “The ten commandments for engineers”)
Good morning pups. Writing used to come easy for me. I could whip out a 1000 word essay if I sat and wrote it without interruption or made corrections and I would not have a lot to edit.
Since I went digital I find my block comes from constant efforts to edit each sentence as I go. I am not nearly so “wordy” and have become much more concise.
Nice topic C-S.
This dude is an excellent writer! Email him for tips.
Writing can be hot wired, so I let that slide.
Morning, Kris.
Just want to say again what an extraordinary post yesterday and well-hosted, too.
Reading along in the afternoon, with the Showdown, Gun Battle and military action displayed in Big Bear and live-yakked on television was surreal, haunting, creepy, and disorienting.
Good morning everyone.
Thank you for the post CS.
When I was working, especially in the couple of years preceding retirement, I did a LOT of both writing and editing. I developed a writing guide for those in my division (Office of Information Technology) to use. It’s a compilation of the sorts of things that give writers problems.
My career was in higher ed, and I feel strongly that no publication, even an official email, should contain grammar, spelling or punctuation errors. And the techies I worked with, many of whom were brilliant technically, were often horrible writers. Their announcements to campus were loaded with techie jargon and grammar and spelling errors.
Laying? Lying….who knows;)
Thanks for a great topic. I know we are casual here, but the reflection is fun.
I miss the disciple of academic/serious writing. So easy to just
get something on the page. Thanks to your sharp mom ;)
Ditto. ya know, for someone who didn’t know what to write you did quite well.
Boxturtle (You even attracted something trollish at the end)
Good wishes on you for that, hope you can counter this massive assault on the public.
That would be discipline….;)
Aahh, so you’ve read my stuff then.
Good morning all and thanks for the postnhost Craney.
Thank you demi. I’m glad you liked it :)
I was talking with oldnslow on the phone around 5pm local time yesterday. We were both watching live news about the Dorner standoff. I remarked that I was amazed at how many folks there were in BDUs carrying military weapons.
Our domestic police force is terrifying.
Hey ya, Boxy.
Thanks. I do love to write. I love words. I love to make people smile. Laughter and love are the best medicine(s).
And, Happy Valentine’s Day to everyone.
And, Happy Birthday to the gals who love JClausen and KrisAinTexas.
It’s a celebration.
And I think I was wrong when I posted (very late) that ‘wayoutwest’ is a sockpuppet for ‘backeast.’ That sockpuppet is ‘headedwest’ and hasn’t been here for awhile either. My bad.
Although the trolling was very similar.
Update on the painting pj. The ladder I was using is kind of old and I had asked the mister if he could paint a couple of high ceiling corner for me. We have cathedral ceilings and I would have to go up to the third or fourth step of the rickety ladder. He told me yes he would and to be very careful and not go higher than I was completely able to navigate. I suggested that we buy a new ladder for Valentine’s Day. He laughed and said that was a good idea. What better way to say I love you, honey, don’t die, okay?
Thanks BT.
It’s a bit surreal for me to get compliments from you folks. I admire the hell out of most of you. When I started coming to FDL in 2007 I was a bit overwhelmed by the quality of writing and the intelligent discussion.
Still a tad scared to wade into the book salons. The level of discussion there is beyond me.
I refer you all to a 2007 post by TRex that has invaluable writing tips:
Home Security by Strunk & White
How to write an angry letter effectively. I bookmarked it then and still refer to it occasionally.
I texted her to tell her you said that :) She says ‘Thank you demi! Who is demi?’.
I ask myself the same question from time to time.
Now that is some intimidating style. Almost enough to make me shut up and sit on my hands.
Good Morning, oldgold. Your contributions here are, well shall I say Golden?
My god. What a sentence. I’m dumbstruck by the beauty of the prose.
Piece on the “bundling” by airlines; wow, they are making
a fortune. What a mess.
“This pudgy slightly damp man who smelled of Ding Dongs, Hai Karate and danger “. . .
Good Morning Crane Station and Firedogs
what a great topic. blogging and FDL in particular, has given me great appreciation for the economy of words and grammar in good writing. Yew hippies talk purdy
there is an Annual Bulwer-Lytton Competition:
Here are 2012′s Winners
Yew hippies talk purdy.
It’s amazing how not worrying about bras, make-up, matching jewelry leaves one with more energy for purdy talkin’.
How you doing, hon?
Everyone did cease sinning at midnight and begin repenting for Lent?
Yeeeecccchhhhhhh.
Boxturtle (If I had turned in any of those openings in school, I’d still be in detention)
OMG those are wonderful!!
Nope. Life is much simpler for those of us who are nonbelievers. But I was out to dinner with a group of neighbors, all of whom are Catholic, and we feasted until we waddled out to our cars.
I was asleep at midnight, I haven’t had much chance to sin yet today. I doubt I’ll stop, I probably don’t even know the difference between sin and a party foul anymore.
Boxturtle (Why should I repent when I haven’t even pent yet?)
I’d have to be honestly self reflective to answer that question, but now you’ve got me contemplating having a McDonald’s fish filet sandwich for lunch. I remember they used to discount those sammies during Lent. I hope they are still continuing that marketing ploy.
I wish I had been sinning;)) Thanks for asking.
pretty damn good sister – although now slightly behind the eight ball for tomorrow’s cake – I should be in the kitchen conjuring up yet more fondant doncha know.
although never big on Valentine’s Day, oldnslow and I celebrated last night (hoping to babysit grandbabies tomorrow) and I’ll be go to hell if he didn’t completely knock my socks off with a surprise fabu dinner (scallops, risotto, and creme brulee) date. lookin’ at me the whole time like we’d just met – damn, the man is fine
howz, ’bout you ?
Those are brilliant!
Life is much simpler for those of us who are nonbelievers.
Well, okay, if you want to take the easy way. Ha!
not in front of the kids
aren’t they ? I look forward to it every year :D
Is it possible to do that while asleep?
Your old man is one of the finest I’ve met. True Statement.
I’m feeling a little flu-ish. Woke up yesterday feeling like I was hit by a truck and at first I thought it was muscle soreness from all the painting, but then as the day went on, I realized, no, there’s a bug in there. But, better today, thanks.
Funny, we always did celebrate Lent though not a Catholic, and talked about giving up stuff. I think the difference is that traditional protestants aren’t comfortable with some of the ceremony but feel like we’re supposed to have some serious practices leading up to Easter.
oh please, be grateful I didn’t re post my early am submission at GRILF’s Gone Wild !™
missin’ ya
Goodness, took me a minute to edit. My problem, even after edit, I sill find stuff. Missing letters. Transposed words. All that, so took a minute, and I hope it makes sense!
I’ve got a fireplace full of ashes, if you want some.
There is a practice some follow that involves writing down heart aches, guilts, grief on little pieces of paper that you burn. Letting them all go up in smoke. I like rituals. I’m a human.
On Mardi Gras, I thought it was obligatory. Maybe next year.
Continuing with educating the “public,” with easy specifics, at a very local level. Enlisting some like minded help, refusing to let anyone grease our squeaky wheels.
They are beginning to hear us coming and whether we eventually turn any heads remains to be seen. A couple of huge state-wide issues pending.
glad you’re better.
I NEVER get sick, but have been laid out twice in the last 4 weeks – some particularly vicious bugs this season
Look out, you;re just asking for discussion of Free Will.
I have followed the Wretched Writer’s (B-W) contest for YEARS! Absolutely my favorite, and what I love is that its great writers, pretending to be bad. I wear, I might trough my hat in this year!
…it was a dark and stormy night…”
LOVE it!
Wow, I lived in New Orleans for yearrrrrs; I saw a bit of the
Mardi Gras on TV while I was out yesterday. All I could say was
sooo glad not to be there. What a mess; seen one, you’ve seen them all (some of us think).
Great topic. I used to teach writing in my class to fledgling economists, who couldn’t tell a gerund from a participle if it smacked them in the face. My rule was, read your prose out loud; if it doesn’t make any sense, your sentence is screwed up and you have to start over. The other piece of advice was not to write beyond your ability. Economics is a complex subject; there are a lot of things going on at the same time, which tempts one to construct sentences that capture the complexity and simultaneity. It takes a lot of practice to control complex sentences. In the beginning it is better to break them into simpler pieces. I also said, we are not looking for originality here; we are looking for clarity. It’s harder than you think.
As to getting past writer’s block, I try everything: outlines to see where I am going, opening paragraphs and pages to work up some momentum, fake essays along the lines of ‘what exactly do I want to say’ in simple language, as if I were speaking to a child. Once I find the thread, something happens to my concentration, and connections that would never have come to me if I tried deliberately to make them come in from out of the blue, and everything I read seems to have meaning.
It is a very wasteful way to compose a piece of writing, but it’s the only one that works for me. Sometimes I go back to one of my essays, and I ask myself, how did I do that? It is as if when I am writing well, I am in a different state of consciousness.
*poke with a stick*
Free Willy? Terrible movie.
Missin you this morning. Thinkin about takin the rest of the day off. No work here.
Ashes make great fertilizer! Being married to a Catholic for a long while, I got pretty annoyed with the sinning being fine as long as you got forgiven for it later. Not my idea of what’s intended by good works.
I’ve heard. I was almost tempted to fix up a brew of yellowsnapdragons garlic lemon tea yesterday. Might still do it today.
…ans suddenly…a dog barked.
Just the sort of discussion most appropriate.
believe a few of our online luminaries, eg, Pierce, atrios, TBogg – regularly submit entries
Yeah, that last minute confession and repreve for, as Kris calls them, catlicks, is what made me very dubious.
awwww
Valentines is coming.
Whenever I see your font I immediately sit up and concentrate on your post. You write like I would like to write and you are willing to share your unique perspectives with all of us armchair economists.
Its always great to see you at FDL. :)
Oh, man. Why didn’t someone say Demi, check your calendar.
I blame the flu bug.
(Sheepishly hanging my head.)
real echinacea (sp?) has worked for me in the past
although anything with garlic should help.
You still got it? I had missed that, if so.
Im sorry.
Take good care, rest, etc. Not fun.
Crane-Station, I just noticed that you don’t have Over Easy as one of your post tags. You might want to add that, so that this post is easier to find, and winds up in the Over Easy archive.
I leave that out of the tags often and have to go back and add it.
It’s challenging for me to rest, especially when I have a project I want to complete. But, I think you’re correct and may take another slow day.
Great suggestions!
Ideas, for indoor type: the new Facebook graph, maybe, although no launched; search opinions at Court of Appeals sises and type a term into the box.
Kris said, and I agree, Twitter.
Also, I like:
I love Stumbleupon and vimeo to search for interests, plus smithsonian, CDC, NASA, USGS, Brookings Institue, CARE/Peace Corp/Greenpeace/ arctic climate and wildlife.
Excellent advice, Knut. I’ve been struggling to understand things like Krugman’s posts and Joe Firestone’s PCS posts, and a clear writing style makes economics topics much more understandable to those of econ duncehood.
Taking care of it now, and thank you!
I also have trouble with the idea that fasting is required at Lent, except for a list of folks who don’t have to, like older people. Somehow if there are rules they should apply to everyone.
But then, as a nonbeliever, I prolly should just keep my mouth shut. Nothing in religion makes much sense to me.
When I was sick, I think it was sleep that helped
more than anything else. Seemed like it…
For those who haven’t seen this,
Blasphemy…
I don’t recall “fasting”…I do find the idea/practice of
giving something up to be worthwhile.
Oh heck no! I wasn’t even talking about this site! HAha, LOL!I love the posts at Firedoglake, no problem at all!
One of my absolute favorite pictures on the internet! Thanks for the smile.
The Drink Lib. had a speech-watching meeting last night.
I still think I will get to one of the meetings.
Do you have any interest? Greenwarrior had said something,
also. Now, there is one site that is very near to me around
Burnet Rd. I should try that.
If you haven’t read it already, may I recommend The Last Week by Marcus Borg and John Dominic Crossan.
The authors
This came up last night at dinner with neighbors. Yesterday was “fat Tuesday” when people are supposed to eat a last big meal before the Lenten fasting (Ash Wednesday, Fridays, etc.) One neighbor commented that she’d heard people over 62 were exempt.
My (long ex)husband was raised Catholic, and in those days we didn’t eat meat on Fridays. I guess the concept is “giving something up” but it never made much sense to give up some kinds of food. To me, giving something up is what you do with bad habits or behaviors or things you shouldn’t do like smoking or overeating. But as I said upthread, I’m entirely the wrong person to have opinions on religious practices, as long as they don’t affect me personally.
Thanks….I do know some of their other work, but not
that one. They are very credible scholars. Many thanks.
much to my ongoing consternation, most of you don’t do twitter –
which means you miss out on Six Word Stories
demi - there was a Six Words Screen Treatment a few weeks back
and there is always Six-Word_Memoirs
I am indeed interested. Need to find a night where the timing works out with the rest of my household. I’m sure oldnslow and cbl would like to go as well.
The regular night is Tuesday; for some reason I always
get surprised. The upcoming one may be at the nearby spot.
But I think I do not usually get the email until very late.
I’ll let you know when I see anything.
Bookmarked and thanks, cbl.
I think I’m going to take Rev Bev’s advice and go lay, lie ly down to read.
Thanks, C-S. Nice post and thread.
See yaz.
How could I have forgotten or simply ignored that religious tenet of our local wing-nuttery legislators as it applies to their public behavior and actions, that explains their seeming lack of sympathy or empathy for anything even slightly humanistic or in the public interest?
Maybe 44 years away from the believing those tenets and expanding an intuitive conscience during that time has something to do with it.
Thank you, Ruth.
“Once I was young and had so much more orientation and could talk with nervous intelligence about everything and with clarity and without as much literary preambling as this; in other words this is the story of an unself-confident man, at the same time of an egomaniac, naturally, facetious won’t do—just to start at the beginning and let the truth seep out, that’s what I’ll do—. It began on a warm summernight—ah, she was sitting on the fender with Julien Alexander who is . . . let me begin with a history of the subterraneans of San Francisco . . .”
The beginning of The Subterraneans by Jack Kerouac. It is a fantastic stream-of-conscious novel or novela-length poem. After reading the first line I continued reading the entire book, finished probably the next day. I took a class at the U of South Florida taught by Kerouac’s best friend and fellow beat poet Willie Reader. He taught me in a class called Folk Rock Lyric. (Needless to say, they don’t teach that one anymore -I guess they didn’t want more students turning out like me.
I will be back to my normal self next week. Legal writing is so different and formulaic. My lengthy legal brief, if you look at the style, my personality is not apparent. Which is good, otherwise it might look like an Onion article, LOL!
I’ll be back to essays next week, I promise!
For my essays, I write notes/ quotes/brief tidbits all in a book, usually, before I put then into the edit page. I try to have them done ahead (doesn’t always happen)and some days are lots worse than others with mistakes!
“Sing, goddess, the anger of Peleus’ son Achilleus
and its devastation, which put pains thousand-fold upon the
Achaians,
hurled in their multitudes to the house of Hades strong souls
of heroes, but gave their bodies to be the delicate feasting
of dogs, of all birds, and the will of Zeus was accomplished….”
Homer’s Iliad, Richmond Lattimore translation.
“America I’ve given you all and now I’m nothing. America two dollars and thirty-seven cents January 17, 1956.”
Written by Allen Ginsberg 5 days before I was born.
Sorry I just saw this as you’re heading away. I hope you’re feeling better soon.
Sorry I had to change your image but it was specified for ‘noncommercial’ use. If you had specific permission to use it back let me know and I’ll put it back.
Great topic. I love first lines. One of my favorites is:
If you want a study in how great first lines draw you in, check out The Science Fiction Hall of Fame, Vol. 1: 1929-1964. These were stories selected by the Science Fiction Writers of America some decades ago as the modern classics of their field. Not only does almost every story stand up as readable to this day, but every single one has a killer opening line.
When are the Austin area FDLers going to meet for drinks anyway? ;)
I’m currently reading Tolstoy abridged Peace.
I don’t think you have to apologize for anything or “be back” to anything. Over Easy is a grab-bag, and we write about what interests us or catches our eye, trusting that the commenters will carry the discussion wherever it leads.
The topic of effective writing is dear to my heart. I love your mom’s suggestions.
Reviewing our effectiveness as communicators is vital. Thanks for the post. Several great ideas came out in the comments, immediately applicable to evaluating some very current projects.
Good day pups.
Thank you, CS.
I wish that message board posters would not post a link to a video with no indication of how long the video is or why you are linking readers to it.
Dang, lost a comment, hope it doesn’t double post!
My bad on the photo. I have not looked at it closely enough, AND I had overlooked attribution, goodness, so sorry.
That said, my reading genre is usually non-fiction, historical satire and truth-based fiction, and Mother Goose/older fairy tales.
However: Neill Gaiman (American Gods), Robert McCammon (Boy’s Life), even Michael Crichton, and Naaem Murr (The Boy)an and King (The Stand) are all authors who combine fantasy, Americana, horror, and sciensfiction. I really enjoy that.
I will have a look at your reference but wanted to add that a science fiction writer is going to address trolls by making financial donations human rights causes and charities, every time a troll makes a foul, derogatory remark to him or on his site!
Hey, thankz,
cbl
this cake for spuds Mom (glaze in a few)
come into the lemon place
https://picasaweb.google.com/lh/photo/Yjdq6WDGfbPE77JBWEPEWw8szHUx-OY9EC-wKjAl8ho?feat=directlink
Beautiful. Looks like a professional food photography photo, fabulous dish also!
I love the lemon place. Thank you.
Two observations: You’re hair is getting long and Spuds sure does love his mustard, right?
Yes, and the thing is that things are faster, shorter, more likely to be skimmed.For example, the word unspoken speed limit was around 1000 words a while back, then backed off even more to abound 800 words, I think Kris mentioned 700, and now I am seeing in 2013 blogging tips a 500-700 limit.
In my mind, 500 is too short to develop much of an idea- why not just use Twitter, unless it is a news update or a video.
The photographer has a real eye for his subject.
It’s a wonderful shot. Real. I just love Real.
I try to stay shorter than 1,000. Yesterday’s post ended up being around 1,150.
I consider 1,000 to be a long post and hope people read it in its entirety.
I’ve got around 5,000 words total, including yesterday, for the series of posts thus far. I’m trying to edit myself, figure out how to wrap up neatly, and keep the series from going longer than I had originally intended.
I write until it’s done. Sometimes shorter, sometimes longer. I think I hear you, but wanted to share one more thing.
This is the first three lines from the ee cummings poem, Since Feeling Is First:
since feeling is first
who pays any attention
to the syntax of things
will never wholly kiss you;
Something to ponder.
Okay. Four lines.
(She never said she was a math whiz.)
Ambushed by humor, coffee spewing from my mouth and dancing over the keyboard. Like words, only different. :)
I remember “Write what you know” being a golden rule.
Test tasting is like soft lemon drop eating and lovely.
To be fair, one is empty and needs tossed, but you don’t know my mom. The other is un opened and wasn’t put away when it came home. And 3, next time you make spaghetti, put a Tbs of mustard in the sauce. Takes care of that bland taste common in most sauce brands. :<P
Just checked back….I have no idea. There has been discussion with Kris, etc. We could push now that it’s getting warm. Does the Drinking Libs interest you? Im interested, just never got there. Thanks for asking. Im sure we could do it….I must say
my own schedule is quite unpredictable. What do you suggest?
I will try that.
I think I might be related to your mom. Waste not and all that.
Thank you for a great post, Crane-Station. I’m stepping forward in a fight to stop “the biggest bottling plant in North America” from being built in our community. It’s time to hone the writing skills for public communication.
PS, and, when it’s empty it’s a useful pot, container, spray bottle to put something else in.
A haiku response to Jesus Rap.
I think there is now a crack in the literary space-time continuum.
Bitchin’.
Okay, openhope’s comment wasn’t a technical haiku. Neither was mine. But close enough for crude American work, right?
I hit jarred sauces with a tablespoon of sugar, more garlic (powder, usually) and more onion (powder, usually). Never tried mustard. I’ll give that a shot.
You and I think alike in that. About 1000 words, give or take, words for me. I was surprised to see the 500 word thing, because you can’t really develop an idea that quick!
Also, what do folks think about Facebook Graph Search?
Hear, hear!
Enough crap like this!
BTW, if I seem a little dyslexic today, it’s because I get off parole within the week, maybe as soon as Friday, Yay!
I’m a lazy American. Haiku’s are too hard.
Do read TRex’s article I linked to in #26. Rereading it whenever I’m thinking of firing off an indignant letter has made those letters much more effective, I think.
I don’t even know what that means.
I’ve written letters to food companies like those who use mustard containers that make it nearly impossible to extract and use the entire contents of the container.
I am sensing that I may have provoked unintended consequences in that more companies seem to be using containers that promote waste of ingredients with impossible to empty containers.
Hey, thanks. TRex’s essay was a cornerstone during my “angry letters-to-the-editor” days. It’s been years since I read it.
If you harness your ability to provoke unintended consequences, could you give a teaching?
Great suggestion, guilty as charged. I generally try to remember to specify where a link is going if it is a written piece that doesn’t explain its general content when I mouse over the link.
A few threads swap music tube urls on a theme and are a little more casual and the surprise as to what someone else is posting is often times enjoyable.
It has helped me many times. When I get worked up and start writing, I get diarrhea of the fingers and go on and on, wandering off into other points that have absolutely no relevance to the topic of the letter.
And his caution to use paper instead of email is good, too. I’ve written many emails to my congresscritters, and eventually I get a boilerplate reply that often isn’t a response to the topic of my email. So if I feel strongly I will actually use paper and a stamp!
The other thing that annoys me is when someone links to a PDF and doesn’t label it for the reader. I often don’t want to automatically download a big PDF, which is what happens when I click the link.
I’ve learned to hover my cursor over the link and look at the URL. If it’s a YouTube or PDF, I often skip the link.
I’ll try to remember to take note of that, if it occurs again. I’ve thus far been pretty successful in avoiding unintended consequences with my teen, if that counts for anything.
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Another writing tactic, know when to drop other activities and concentrate on the task at hand, even when in the middle of enjoyable distractions.
Deadline looming, later, pups.
I no longer believe letters to congresscritters work in non-election years . Where I see horror at the thought of selling 5 million gallons of water a day under a 30 year , my elected representatives see $$ and job security. Fuck them. If you’re trying to save fresh water, it’s pointless to hang with the pond scum.
We need to wake up all the people who depend on that water.
And also you can pour some boiling water in it, dump that out and roll it in a nice little ball, then score two points as you slam dunk it in the trash can.
It counts. I found it wasn’t to be trusted the morning I was awaken by cops at the door wanting to question my son about his friend’s activity. Ah, Motherhood. Not for wimps!
Oh, I don’t know. I wouldn’t worry about it. I doubt you letters have that consequence.
I learned that trying it is possession, even if it was not you who produced it at the teen party. This is after the fact when I gave the teen instructions to be sure to tell the truth in an investigation for something else that was allegedly going on. Never give anything to authorities without the advise of an attorney.
As I get older and the arthritis in my hands takes its toll on my hand strength, I find that I have trouble opening some containers. I wrote to one company and informed them that I will no longer buy their product because I can’t open the container. I received an apologetic letter with some coupons for their other products, but the container in question remains.
I now only buy one brand of toilet bowl cleaner, because I can’t open the others. Fortunately it’s an adequate product.
What chu got against Youtube links?
You might be missing something enjoyable.
I don’t clink on all links, but the way I do is I base my clicking on what I know of the commenter who posted. It’s a judgement call based on an intellectual and emotional instinct rather than a prejudgement.
Really? All youtube links?
Hi (((demi)))
Was being a tiny bit cute with that comment, but I do look at containers when making some food choices and have voiced the concern to several brand suppliers if their product is one that I enjoy. The pound container is now 13 ounces and loosing part of that, short of diluting it to rinse the container clean, was worth a friendly request for thought on the subject.
Now, where did I place that self-discipline I was looking for a few minutes ago?
Or, at whomever let their little doggie poop on my lawn.
Presents from my four leggeds are more welcome than those left by strangers.
I actually really like your choice. Has some cathartic advantages.
Excellent advice. The cops came to his work place and tried to get him to make a statement and sign it. Very intimidating, aggressive stance. He told them it wasn’t his problem, he wasn’t signing anything, he was strong and non-threatening. They backed down.
This was a few years ago. Cops have been given increasing acceptance to use overt thug tactics since then.
Time to go clean the chicken coop. A clean nesting box is a happy nesting box.
Tomorrow, One Billion Rising! I’m excited. I haven’t been this excited about Valentine’s Day since my tween years!
I have to apologize for not always picking up on your sense of humor.
I just…I don’t know, but, :(.
I said “often,” not “all,” demi. And I decide to to click based on whether I think I will be interested in seeing it or will be better informed by it, not who the poster is.
Ah, so we are different people and we do things differently.
Thanks, Molly.
Hi y’all. Love the topic and the title. All through high school in Indianapolis we had to write a “theme” every week.
But first, we h ad to turn in an outline, the most important part of which was..the first and last line of the theme.
I can’t imagine better training for writing. My cassmates still write pretty well and without apparent agony.
And my classmates. FDo seem still to write easily and pretty well.
We’re now testing the cake. That one was wonderful, now for the real thing.
So spud thinks.
There are so many really good writers who hang out around here that it can be intimidating sometimes.
That said, whenever I’m asked to edit or proofread someone else’s work, I try to encourage them to just say what they want to say simply. I’ve heard a lot of people explain verbally the point they want to make and then ask, “so how should I write that?”
Just say what you want to say and you will get your point accross better than if you fiddle around with fancypants word contortions. That’s my philosophy.
Anyone here write fiction? That’s a totally different animal.
Honestly, I think I learned to write from reading and typing legal briefs for my college gig. There are a lot of legal terms that get in the way, but the writing itself is very matter of fact and exactly to the point.
LOL.
Red is hot and black is ground. Yer welcome.
Nummers. Way to do it. You have to test it, of course.
And, also, your telling us about drizzling…my guys don’t like inches of icing goop. Dusted with powder or drizzed with liquid goodness is what they prefer.
Sonny and I just returned from buying items for a recipe he found on youtube. Melted chocolate and melted cool whip and rolled into balls. I suggested the possibility of adding chopped walnuts and he offered that we could add some rum, that’s what the recipe said was an option.
I freaking love options.
Just because I occasionally leave inappropriate things at the end of threads.
Mercy.
K.
I was listening and my 19 year old asked me to please turn in down.
K?
Ha, Kris, you know I dig ya.
Guess I’ll hafta go have a smoke now.
:)
And this one. Unless you have epilepsy. Don’t watch it if you have epilepsy.
Watch the Throne.
Oh the lulz! When a 19 year old tells you to turn it down, you know it’s bad.
Don’t play the 2nd one!
Fool me once…
Babe.
Then he buys her a filet-o-fish fish.
So romantic! :o)
Well. It kind of is romantic, in a certain non syntax kind of way. I do love the filet-o-fish, as I said earlier.
Gawd! Was that today? Eh, you know how the day goes slow when you are under a bug.
Maybe I’ll do take out spicy chinese for dinner. That’s sounds good, doesn’t it? I could have some war won ton soup.
The ticket.
And, thanks for using the big-nosed smiley face with me lately.
Makes me smile and feel good.
Oh, if I were a true writer, instead I would have merely said,
I see what you’re doing.
i’m sure you’re right. Copying and thinking about what you’re typing imprints it in your brain, and leaves a model there to follow.
And by the way, I apologize for all the typos on that comment. I was in a restaurant typing on my phone, and it was [very] funky.
I did actually type another comment with a similar apology, but no matter how many times I pressed “submit,” it did not submit.
Finally I gave up and left.
May I add one thing to Crane’s (mother’s) suggestions (all of which I agree with): Make your paragraphs relatively short, and leave white space; especially online. The reader’s eyes will be much less fatigued that way.
Honestly, when I run across a long, long post or comment without paragraphs, or without spaces between grafs, I just skip them. My variation of TLDR (too long, didn’t read). It’s just too hard on my eyes.
You’re a doll, tejanarusa.
I always smile when I read your end of the day comments.
Hoot!
demi, thank you for the kind comment. You’ve noticed, I’m often the very last one….talk about epu-land.
See ya tomorrow, I hope (may not have time to check in, but one never knows).
Looking forward to whenever it happens.
I try for open.
My fave first lines are both from science-fiction author Henry Kuttner: